This story made me laugh out loud (I even got a weird look from my boyfriend as I was reading), and the little twist at the end really caught me by surprise. I thought it was a cute interview piece using the character of your handle.


I have never entered the dialogue contest before but you made it look easy! I thought you did an excellent job fitting your storyline in with the contest. Once the interviewer's tone began to change I was drawn into the narration more, and it made me want to find out what was going to happen. I haven't often read any short stories that follow a strict dialogue only structure but it caught my attention and I enjoyed reading it.


I don't have any suggestions for you as your writing appears to be quite good. The only suggestion I might possibly have is to see more stories about the Jellyfish character (if you haven't already, this is my first visit to your portfolio)!


I thought the way the personality of you/your character was shown increased the interest, especially once the interviewer began getting aggressive and earned his fate. You did an excellent job on this story and I look forward to reading more of your work.








My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .