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OVERALL IMPRESSION -
Scary tale you wrote here. Devin's fears really stood out as he hid, waiting, wondering how he would get out of there.

WHAT I LIKED BEST -
Great descriptions really pull the reader into this haunting tale. I could picture the neighborhood as the lights went out one by one, the town going to sleep.

PLOT~
Devin is hiding in the shadows, ready to plot his escape but assaulted with voices in his head. The taunt him, torture him making it next to impossible for him to think clearly. All he wanted was to save the girl, and he managed to pull that off, but he knew there would be a price to pay.

CHARACTERS~
Devin is hearing voices, and can never manage to make them stop for long. He's a watcher in the shadows, waiting for his chance to move on from this town, concerned he won't be able to as the voices growing louder, intruding on his every thought. The end was terrifying as he made his way down the path and found the man sitting there, staring him down.

DIALOG~
Inner dialog worked well in this horror story. It heightened Devin's fears and heightened the excitement of your reader.
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