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 Wrong Delivery Open in new Window. [E]
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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OVERALL IMPRESSION -
You worked the words in well that you needed to. It was left open ended and I really was curious as to where the flowers came from, especially since when she found out that Mark hadn't sent them she felt it was creepy.

WHAT I LIKED BEST -
I liked how her coworkers were all interested in them, and that she automatically assumed Mark had sent them. His reaction was spot on.

PLOT~
Stacie receives a bouquet of flowers at work. The note is signed cupid and she questions her co-workers about who they are from. Then she calls Mark and thanks him for the flowers, assuming he sent them to her only to find out he hadn't.

CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT~
Mark's reaction to finding out his woman had been sent flowers worked well. Stacie's excitement changed once she realized is wasn't Mark and she had no clue who thought she was the most beautiful woman. That definitely could be a scary thing.

DIALOG~
The conversations at the office added to the scene and it was easy to picture them all checking out the flowers and waiting to find out who sent them to Stacie. When she tells Mark that Carole was drooling over them so she intended to let her have the flowers made me laugh.

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