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Bears Open in new Window. [E]
This story is one of several created while working near Yellowstone one summer.
by QueenNormaJean maybesnow?! Author Icon
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello normajean,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your twelfth year with us.


Overall Impression: This was a very well written story. And I liked it a whole lot.

The Story Itself: What I liked the best about this story was how it ended. I'm a big fan of twist at the end of a story. But when you can make me smile and laugh it's even better.

Your Characters: The only thing I would have done differently with this story is given them names. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke: There wasn't a lot of dialogue in this story. What dialogue there was looked good to me. the only thing I would have done differently was not starting two sentences with the same word. But that's just the way I like to write my stories.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: It looks like you made an error in Tense in this story. Shouldn't it be 'were' instead 'are?' You might want to look into that.

Any Last Thoughts: I think you did a great job with this story. Do you have any more stories like this one? If so, and they are as good or better than this one I would definitely like to read them too if I can.


If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi Author Icon portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus Author Icon portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

                                       PureSciFi aka spacefaction
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