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Warped Sanity, thanks for the privilege of reviewing you poem. I hope this will encourage you today.

*ButtonV*Overall Impression: This is a great rendering of the cascade poetry format. The lines of the first verse are all used as the last lines of subsequent verses. This is a very important message as well. "Though technology has become ubiquitous these days, it must never be allowed to replace real connect with humans in the real world of each of our lives."

*Pencil*Suggestions: Basically, this is just a thank you for including rhymes. Rhymes make a more pleasant read for me personally. I think you could write more of this form. It seems to work well for you.

*Apple*Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar: This part of your poem seems pretty accurate. Good job.

*Heart*What I Like: I like the cascade form and you have created it well. Also, I like the fact that you have given the reader a sobering message in a format that is enjoyable to read. Well done, Dear Lady! *BigSmile*

*StarB* A Rising Star Member to Member review.

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