Hello, hellomrsunrise

I'm offering you this review in celebration of Earth Day, which is marked on the 22^nd April every year, and on behalf of "The Earth Day Challenge" 

Thank you for being aware of our planet and the environment.

What I liked

I love the bit about the snowflake in his hand. The overall flow of your poem is wonderful. You've made some awesome word choices - I had to look up "plumbeous"

What might need work

Various of the rhymes you've chosen don't work, ie. read/red/sad don't rhyme at all, day/grave/stay- grave doesn't match in either stanza they are used in.

“There’s beauty here” they always said - I'd suggest that where you have speech, use proper punctuation, ie use a comma in this example: "There's beauty here," they always said.

Thank you for sharing!

Best wishes,

Bob






My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .