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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi Christopher Roy Denton *Hug*

Guess who? *Laugh* I couldn't let poem conceived in such a brilliant mind pass by without comment. I'm pleased to read and comment on your work "Invalid Item" Open in new Window. on behalf of "Earth Day Challengers" Open in new Window..

*Flower1* First Impression/Thoughts:
Original take (and I would expect nothing less) on your approach to Earth Day. Over population, disappearing species, and - while you left the causal relationship hanging - the questions remain and need to be asked.

*Flower3* Creativity/Impact:
A sonnet, huh? *BigSmile* The very essence of love poetry used to inform and question our relationship with the planet. Very creative.

*Flower4* Message/Theme:
*FacePalm* Uhhh, Earth Day? *Laugh* Seriously, you tackle the impact of man, touch on corporate greed, and advocate at least looking at man's impact on the world.

*Flower2* Technique/Technical Notes: I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. I encourage you to consider what I offer but always follow your instinct and heart. You are the poet.

*Vine1* Title: Very brooding and creative (a word self portrait perhaps? *Laugh*) sure to catch the attention of readers. The "teaser" line (or description *Smile*) offers an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. Again, creative and informative.

*Vine1* Grammar/Wording: Well chosen words, well structured lines, and meaningful verses. As usual, a well thought message.

*Vine1* Form/Flow: Ahhh - my favorite form, The English Sonnet. I'm the first to admit that I'm "iambically challenged" as you well know so I'll refrain from commenting on meter. The remainder is form perfect. I'm not sure about "a brief eclipse" (the obscuration of the light) really being what you meant to say but, I will bow to your poetic wisdom *BigSmile*

*Flower6* Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A creative and angled look at our trouble in paradise. Over population and the fight for scarce resources certainly contribute to the issues we're having. How much of an impact is up for debate - that we ARE an impact isn't. Thank you for sharing your imagination and talent with me today. *Kiss*

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best for Earth Day 2017,

Ken

Everyday is Earth Day!

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