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This is a review from "Invalid Item" Hello Steev the Friction Wizurd Disclaimer: These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful and disregard the rest I found you featured in the Horror/Scary Newsletter. Congrats What I like: I like the title. It is what drew me into reading your story. I also like the ending. You left me wondering what happens. Does Hank kill his wife? If he does how? Overall Impression: A well written story. It has a good story line and the plot moves along at a great pace keeping the reader turning the page and wanting more. Great job. I kept wondering if the tea had been poisoned. Suggestions: Some type of physical description of the characters and maybe a flaw would make them more believable. And add in a little description of the setting. I noticed you used several passive verbs. If some could be changed to active verbs it would make the story stronger. Final Thoughts/Conclusion: I enjoyed reading your story. Thank you for sharing your story. Keep on writing! Gypsy Ann My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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