Hey there. I am here for a small review for you.I laughed so much after I read the poem. Good job done. The form is new to me so I am not very confident about that, but the poem is indeed fun. I actually wanted to try for the contest, but never thought it could be this fun.I always have associated oriental poetry with nature somehow or something deeper. This is not a criticism for the poem in anyway, but more of a compliment because you tried something new and it was fun.


Just a small thing that bracket distracted me. You really don't need it. Poem is good anyway without it.