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 | We Seem to be Made to Suffer  [GC] This is a series of 4 vignettes  |
| (4.5)| Thank you for participating in the "Invalid Item" contest! Because you referenced this contest in your entry, I am reviewing your entry as promised. My review is intended to be helpful and encouraging. Please accept it in the spirit it is given. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** Prompt: "We seem to be made to suffer. It's our lot in life." Star Wars (1977) First impression: My first impression while reading this is that anyone who has experienced losing a child in this way can completely understand the emotions and thought process of your main character. This "story" is heartbreaking and in no way can be fully understood unless you have experienced it yourself. I feel that this piece is written in such a way that even if you have not experienced something like this, you can certainly feel the pain that is so expertly portrayed. I like that you separated the experiences and stages of grief that way that you did. It allows your readers to follow the process with the character. The story can be followed easily by your readers and also allows their imagination to unfold with the story. Does this poem reference the prompt?: Yes Suggestions: None. I feel that your piece is polished and well written. Final thoughts: I really hope that this piece is not written from experience, but it it is, I am sorry for your loss or anyone's loss who as gone thru something like this. I feel that your vignettes do what all writers aspire to do which is make their readers feel and not only contemplate the story line but also the future of the character. I also feel that it leaves your readers with food for thought concerning their own lives and perhaps what would they do in a similar situation. This concludes my review. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work and for participating in my contest. I wish you continued success with your writing and in life. Good luck in the contest! Write on, read on, rate on!~ Taryn
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