Hi paddy1

I am reviewing your poem, "Invalid Item"  as part of "I Write in December-January-February" .

Firstly, I love how you have used red for the first and last lines, which both mention fire. It fits the poem perfectly, and it looks really good.

I love what you have done with the prompt. I've never seen the film "Harold and Maude," so I don't know if this particular scene is reflective of that. But it doesn't matter. This poem creates a beautiful scene of an early morning. You begin with the red sun. climbing higher in the sky. You give us some lovely descriptions, like when you describe the sky as "that stretch of blue above your head." This gives the impression of a lazy summer's day full of possibilities.

I love the dewdrops hanging from blades of grass. I love the long fingers of colour stretching across the sky. The part about trying to compose words for birdsongs made me chuckle. I've done that before.

What I love most, though, is the overall feeling of simplicity. By that, I mean having nothing to do or worry about other than the long, summer's day stretching ahead of you. The feeling of freedom. I love that.

This is a beautiful poem. It captures a perfect moment in nature. It makes me feel quite nostalgic. I grew up in the country, and this poem takes me back there. I love it.

Choconut



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .