Ember_Rain, thank you for the privilege of reviewing your short story. As we both know, I will be sharing my thoughts in the hope, that something I write will encourage you, personally, and strengthen you as a writer.

Overall Impression: You are writing historical fiction. Alister Crowley was a real person, who as I recall had something to do with the creation of tarot cards.

Suggestions: It could be interesting to hear more of the protagonists back-story, especially to find out if some event gave her a propensity toward this clairvoyance.

Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar: This seemed pretty accurate. In other words nothing really "jumped out at me."

What I Like: You let the young girl have an innocence about her. She appears to understand she is involved in something BIG, but as yet, she still really does not know what. In addition I would like to say, "Thank you for the way in which you handled your subject matter!" I would consider weird tales to be somewhere in the neighborhood of the horror genre. I don't frequent that neighborhood very often, due to taste and experience, unless compelled to do so as in the "I Write..." Challenge. You were clear with your content without being graphic. For this I am eternally grateful. You have the distinction in that regard of being like Anthony Doerr in the book, All The Light We Cannot See. He got his message across without saying or showing too much graphic content. That IS a gift.

Thanks for taking the time to read my review. Have a great 2017! :D



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