Hi maryccasey

I am reviewing your poem, "Invalid Item"  as part of "I Write in December-January-February" .

This is a delightful haiku. The image you create, of the little chipmunk with stuffed cheeks, is cute and funny. It made me smile as I read the first line.

I love everything about this haiku. The last line, "snow covers treasure," works so well. Until this point, we knew little of the surroundings. But this rounds off the image created in the poem. It really is heartwarming.

I also love the picture you used for this. It's exactly how I imagined the scene to look.

I have no advice, or nothing I would change, about this haiku. I genuinely think it's perfection. It's so difficult to write micro poetry (for me, anyway, as I'm not good at condensing my words), but you have got this spot on. Great job!

Choconut



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .