Greetings, I enjoyed reading your folktale, a fun variation on the Krampus tradition

Relating the story in first person, the opening paragraph evokes a sense of foreboding, of mystery. The three children discussing their unique perception of the Krampus, is natural and brings me into the story. The 'thing' that grosses out the kids is fun and reinforces the image of being kids (no spoiler here

The encounter with Krampus and the other (no spoiler) believable and natural I would suggest only, there, to keep it active by showing Krampus's action at their encounter, i.e., {Krampus snickered, as opposed to 'laughing to itself' and shrugged in place of 'seemed to shrug')

The encounter that follows and resolution reads like a folktale, relaying the moral to the story.

The twist at the end alludes to the earlier statement of what grossed the kids out ~ fun

Thank you for sharing this fun tale, and good luck in the contest ^_^


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