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Hi pinkbarbie,I found your writing ad random. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirit.

On Title/Subject
I found the title and the sub-line fitting it's content. It is the story about a very strange witch lady: talking to innate objects as if they have souls, talking to the jack-o-lantern, talking to dolls, stashing human eyeballs in her bedside drawer next to the candy, who remembers her son who left the house twenty years ago. She gets caught into the spooky realm of the ghostly jack-o-lantern and burns to death leaving only a trace of cinder and a black burnt spot.

General impressions
I thought this was a very nice and spooky tale with much detail to the thoughts and actions of the old woman. That way you get to know this main character a little better although there is no sympathy for her. She is abusive to her son in his early years and has a stack of human eyeballs inside her drawer. That confused me a little bit, what was that all about? Did she murder people and had their eyeballs taken out? What's the story behind this? You never explain, other than that the eyes are taken to be put inside the jack-o-lantern.

Favorite Parts
"Where are they? I know I kept them somewhere here." She gasped as she opened the drawer by her bed. Not in the first one. She tried the second one. Dead cockroaches. Not there either. The third drawer. Dirty socks. No, no, no! She placed her palm over her white wig. She strode to the other side of her bed where she searched in more drawers. She tried the first drawer. Nothing there. The second one and her mouth fell ajar. She found it. Within a few seconds, drool dripped from the edges of her mouth.

I found this paragraph both distressing as hilarious, the tension is build. I loved the gruesome find of cockroaches in her drawer...brrr...it brings back to mind an image of an elderly lady in a somewhat dirty and neglected household, lonely, awkward and perhaps insane. Someone who doesn't talk to other people much and keeps to herself.

Suggestions
The only confusing thing was about the human eyeballs. I could not wrap my mind around that one. What it meant and what they were exactly. Perhaps you could take another look at that part of the story and elaborate some more?

Final thoughts
All in all a good scary story. I loved the ending where the occult power of the jack-o-lantern is not over yet, it has taken its place into the policeman's car and maybe into his home or the police station. That's the open ending of the story.

Thanks for sharing this story.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive