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Hi Izzy's Writing ,I found your writing at your request. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirit.

On Title/Subject
The title is a bit too exuberant to my taste. I found the whole kneeling thing a bit too much. Maybe you should look into that a little bit more, try to make the reader understand this behavior. The sub line fits the content.

General impressions
* through the wood? strange wording, maybe you should try wooden door.
* but (and) Steve witnessed pain
* frowning concerning or frowning, concern spread through his chest
* POV change is confusing: from Steve to Pavel : "His answer was so quiet "
* Changing back to POV Steve. In such a short short story stick with one POV.
* It's the beginning of a story but I don't feel it's finished. It's a fragment of the relationship between mentor and pupil in hockey. But what is the point you want to make? Why should the reader want to know this? Perhaps you should think about the rest of the story.

Because of the POV changes, it is a little bit out of reach. There is hardly a plot and no problem that hast to be solved, hardly any action. Why should this be of interest to the reader? Maybe you could spice it up a little bit.

Because it is such a short, short fragment the reader doesn't get to know the main characters let alone understand them and have some kind of sympathy for them.
Maybe you should flesh out the characters some more to make this into a longer story?

I loved your Show don't Tell technique used in the story.

The emotions are not felt by the reader, and that is what you try to accomplish here isn't it...otherwise what is the point?

Favorite Parts
Steve could usually tell who was knocking at his door, wanting his attention. His wife, Lisa, always landed three soft “Tap, Tap, Tap.” His daughters, the oldest one being 9 and the other two being 5 and 4, respectively, delivered five loud bangs if they wanted something.

This knock, this noise, consisted of only a single “tap.”

I loved this piece of information on the household of Steve. Very cleverly done.

Final thoughts
All in all a story that didn't work for me. Without more to go on I cannot sympathize with the characters and therefore I don't feel anything for them. I hope you will look at it again and add more flesh to the bones. Thank you for sharing.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive