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 More Sue Open in new Window. [18+]
An insight into relationships.
by RICH Author Icon
Review of More Sue  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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PLOT -
A story of relationships between men and women. A family who names their girls derivatives of Susannah, passes on valuable insights into men and women. Susan relays a story about her and her finance and how things are supposed to go in the future.

SETTING -
Susan telling the story of switching pants was easy to picture as she shared the details of it to her sister, Susie.

CHARACTERS -
Susan, engaged, getting ready to start her new life with her intended, and still having to work a few things out.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE -
No errors. Good dialog between the two girls as they had a conversation about the new loft.

THOUGHTS -
I liked the explanation of what men need at the beginning of the story. That really set the tone for this short story. I thought all of the women being names a form of "Sue" would be an issued, but you explained that as well. Nothing like making a parents job easier to get things done, than by using one name as an umbrella to get everyone's attention. I liked the two girls talking, and Susan sharing this with her sister. It was funny to see Susan turn the tables on her intended so cleverly. He totally thought he had her when he told her to wear his pants, stating it would be the only time she ever did so. Nicely done. Write on!
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