Hi Shivay💃 ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

This is an interesting poem, dear author. Yes, the saying that what comes around, goes around can be quite true!

I like the imagery in this poem. Living in a bubble, thinking that one is settled safely in a tree, only to discover that it's a vine you're (general you) clinging on to, and that vine comes crashing down, taking you along with it. If the person in the poem had cared more, and wasn't merely focusing on his or her desires, that would not have happened.

On the technical side of things, this poem reads well. The presentation is an interesting choice, but I like it. The choice of colour is fitting. It has a pleasant rhythm and flow. Overall, I think you did a good job!

Suggestions:

I do have some suggestions, dear author. I hope you find them helpful!

Stanza 1:

I did all that once i'd admired.

"i'd" should be "I'd".

Stanza 2:

Never once did I looked back

"looked" should be "look".

Stanza 3:

Didn't knew,

"knew" should be "know".

My Rating:

An interesting, creative poem that I was happy to read. Thank you!

There were some little typos, but nothing major. So, I will give this item a rating of 4 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .