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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Callie hears Angels these days Author Icon,

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Overall Impression:

This is a good poem, dear Callie. It spoke to me, and I think that many other readers will be able to relate to it as well.

An active imagination is a wonderful gift. It can carry a person into a myriad of adventures, an endless variety of worlds. Importantly, as this poem expresses, it can help a person escape themselves. Though the reasons for this wish to be someone - anyone - else can be tragic. Such reasons are usually rooted in pain.

On the technical side of things, I think you have done a good job here. The imagery you use is vivid - I had no trouble picturing any of the scenes. Your wording is well-chosen. Nice rhythm and flow. Good use of punctuation, which is very helpful. And allowing the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend upon the individual sentences of the piece perfects the overall clarity and reading experience. Great work.

Suggestions:

I have no suggestions about the actual content of this poem. It works for me. The only tiny thing I can suggest is to delete the line spaces between the lines of this poem. It doesn't need it, and I found those slightly distracting.

My Rating:

A strong poem, and I enjoyed reading. Thank you!

I did have one suggestion, but that's more of a personal preference. So, I will still give this item a rating of 5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit

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