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Review of Easter Gone Wrong  Open in new Window.
Review by NaNoKit Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi amyjo-Keeping it real and fun! Author Icon,

This review is a part of "Game of ThronesOpen in new Window. [13+]. *Smile*

Overall Impression:

I like this poem. *Bigsmile* It perfectly fits the prompt of the contest it was written for - the Anti-Easter Contest.

The poem is about someone who wants to spoil Easter. To do away with the celebrations. They will steal the eggs, make sure there isn't any chocolate, no cute little baskets, or hats, or anything. They'll take away the fun and keep it all to themselves, to end Easter once and for all. The tone is perfect, and I enjoyed the imagery.

On the technical side of things, this poem has a good rhythm and flow that was easy to catch on to. I like the presentation and the larger font - it's easy on the eye. Great job!

Suggestions:

*Snow2* You use some punctuation in this poem. I would be tempted to use it throughout, to further guide the reader and assist the overall clarity.

*Snow2* The other thing I'd suggest is allowing the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend upon the individual sentences within the piece. This would perfect the overall clarity and reading experience.

My Rating:

An enjoyable piece. I was happy to read it, thank you!

I did have a couple of suggestions, but they were more of a personal preference. So, I will still give this item a rating of 5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit

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