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10 Days of Spring Open in new Window. [E]
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello, I am reviewing for Game of Thrones.Thought I would come by and say this was a good beginning of a story. I personally think it needs more to it. It needs more description of what is going on and maybe if there is a prompt that goes along with it you could add that for better clarification. Why are the fairies putting masks and makeup on? What is the point of waiting till the scent of spring comes out before they can dance?
I am going to assume that not all flowers hold fairies?
This was easy to read through and flowed well. I like what descriptions you had, there just needs to be more.
I think this would be a better story if there was more.
I did not see any grammatical errors or spelling errors that is good. The theme of the story include the fact that the fairies are waiting for spring to come through the sent of the flowers.
I have to be honest though. This almost read like a poem, you might look at changing the set up of this short to something more poetic.
This is a good short story. Thank you for sharing, keep writing.
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