Hi CJHanna84 ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

This is a sweet, hopeful poem, dear author. It expresses the thoughts of someone who has found hope again, after a bad experience.

Love is scary sometimes. You put yourself out there, taking the risk that someone is going to hurt you. Crush you. And after a bad experience, you don't want to go through that again. Yet, sometimes someone comes along who shows you life in a different light, and you want to trust again, go with the flow, embrace the experience. This poem expresses this very well.

On the technical side of things, this poem reads well. It has a pleasant rhythm and flow that was easy to catch on to. Good job!

Suggestions:

My suggestions aren't about the content of the poem, which I liked. Just little extras, so to say.

I suggest deleting the line spaces between the lines within each stanza. That way, you can just have a single line space between the stanzas. It would make it easier on the eye, and enhance the reading experience.

I suggest completing the punctuation in this poem, including adding a period where each sentence ends. That would enhance the overall clarity.

Last but not least, I suggest allowing the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend upon the individual sentences within the piece. This would perfect the overall clarity and reading experience.

My Rating:

This is a strong, well-written poem. I enjoyed the read, thank you!

I did have a few suggestions. I won't allow them to affect my rating too much, because some of it is a matter of personal preference. However, it did impact on the clarity of the piece a little bit. Therefore, I will give this item a rating of 4.5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .