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Review by NaNoKit Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Patrece ~ Author Icon,

This review is a part of "Game of ThronesOpen in new Window. [13+]. *Smile*

Overall Impression:

Ah, this is a beautiful poem, dear Patrece! You added a note that you're not really a poet, but I disagree! This piece really touched me.

This poem is about a dog looking for a loving home, after having been neglected and mistreated. And a person who feels empty and alone, with a lot of love to give.

It is sad that there are indeed many people in this world who have a pet, and who don't bother caring for him/her. It breaks my heart. Thankfully, there are plenty of people out there who do value their furry/feathery/scaly companions, and are willing to earn their love and trust. For that, they receive a great reward.

On the technical side of things, this poem reads well. It has a pleasant rhythm and flow. I love your use of punctuation, as this helps guide the reader and assists the overall clarity. And I love that you allow the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend upon the individual sentences within the piece. Great job!

Suggestions:

My only suggestion is related to what I wrote above - there are some places in which you do capitalise the beginning of a line, where it's still part of an ongoing sentence. I suggest correcting that for greater consistency and clarity.

My Rating:

A beautiful, touching poem. I was happy to read it.

I did have one suggestion, but that's more of a personal preference. So, I will still give this item a rating of 5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit

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