Hi 🌑 Darleen - QoD ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

This is a beautiful poem, dear author. I love the imagery of the tree, representing our being.

I could picture everything clearly. I especially love the stanza about the roots - how our actions and thoughts can cause them to either starve and die, or help them grow more connected, just like, indeed, our hearts and our souls.

I also like how, in the first stanza, you sum up every part of the tree and our lives/bodies, and then you work your way down, to expand again in the final stanza. That is cleverly done.

On the technical side of things, this poem reads well. It has a lovely rhythm and flow. It's well-presented and easy on the eye. And I love how you allow the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend upon the individual sentences within the piece. Great job!

Suggestions:

I don't have any suggestions about the content of the poem. I like it the way it is. The only thing I would suggest is to add more punctuation, like a period at the end of a sentence. I think that this would perfect the overall clarity and reading experience.

My Rating:

A lovely poem, that I very much enjoyed reading.

I did have one suggestion, but that was more of a personal preference than anything else. So, I will still give this item the 5 out of 5 it deserves.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .