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Rhythm/Rhyme:
You had a nice rhythm and flow with this intense piece of writing. Some of the rhymes stood out as they related to things from previous stanzas drawing the reader in.

Summary:
It is almost like looking in the mirror and seeing the things about yourself that you do and do not like. Like standing outside of yourself and pinpointing all the flaws and digging deeper still to point them so better choices can be made. This is never an easy undertaking and takes a lot of courage.


Critique:
Wow, I was really impressed with the depths of this short poem. You conveyed a lot of emotion and I could picture someone standing in front of a mirror scrutinizing every aspect of themselves from top to bottom. It's a shame the focus stayed in the negative, but there was also a glimmer of recognition. Hope to do better. To be better and change the things you don't like. You painted a realistic picture of looking within. It was emotional and pulled me in right from the start. Great job with this. Write on! I'm so glad I read this one today. Great talent.

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