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Nobody's Son Open in new Window. [13+]
1/99 Trying to establish my place in the world.
by Fivesixer Author Icon
Review of Nobody's Son  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Rhythm/Rhyme:
Great rhythm and rhyme throughout this heartbreaking poem. I'm impressed that you were able to keep the flow and rhyme going for such a long piece, but it never stumbled, just continued on from one line to the next easily.

Summary:
We never ask to be born, but yet we are and one never knows what kind of life that will be for us. This was sad, a boy feeling unwanted, watching, waiting for semblance of normalcy to take shape and help him grow to become a good man. The guided hand never comes, being shuffled from one place to the next, still searching.


Critique:
I could identify with a lot of what you said, which made reading this a little painful. It's a brutally honest piece that gives a clear insight into such a sad childhood. Children of divorce, abandoned, tragic circumstances, etc all lead us to grow up and figure things out as we go through life on our own. Not the way it should be. I liked that he decided to chose a different path for his own children, that he vowed that they wouldn't suffer the way he had. Bravo for getting down to the grit of this all too common tale. Write on!

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