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Driving  Open in new Window. [E]
Learning to drive; a short story for "A Contest of Firsts" entry
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Review of Driving

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions. This review was done for the Game of Crowns contest.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

After reading this story I think you should change the title to "There and back, to see how far it is". I state that because that phrase in three of the four paragraphs of this story.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

While the story is a bout driving it is not about learning to drive. It is more correctly about the freedom of being able to drive.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Sorry it wasn't Atlas. Sisyphus is the King of Corinth who was sentenced to eternally push the bolder up the hill. Atlas is the man who was charged with holding up the sky. T he atlas mountains in Africa are named after him.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

I like the premise of learning to drive but did not find that story. Please continue to share your stories.

dblameck


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