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The Beautiful Voice Open in new Window. [ASR]
Writing prompt, 500 words maximum
by WakeUpAndLive~doingNaNo'24 Author Icon
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Title of Work: : Beautiful Voice (Short Story, Romance/Love)
Author of Work: : WakeUpAndLive-w8
Date: : July 22

Plot:
Prompt given for story: You have received a bill in the mail and it was incorrect. There was a phone number to call so you give it a ring. The person who answers has a beautiful voice. After several minutes the issue is resolved, but you can't help wondering who this person is with such a beautiful voice so you take a leap and ask the person out. Surprisingly, the person says yes. What happens next?

Scene/Setting:
A woman of fifty five years of age invites the operator on a call she made out on a date. The man on the other end of the phone agrees. They exchange cell phone numbers and agree to meet the next day at 11:00 at a small coffee shop. The woman has a very restless night, wondering first what made her do what she did. She also starts to get nervous about what the man will think of her.

The next morning she tidies up her one bedroom apartment, goes to the store and buys flowers and even steaks and everything else she needs for a cozy dinner for two. She goes to the coffee shop and waits. At 11:15 she starts to think about leaving, when she hears the door to the shop open. A man in the lyrical voice she heard on the phone, asks her if he can buy her a cup of coffee. He is about twenty-five years old and in a wheelchair. She takes him home and has a wonderful time.

Characters:
Woman
Man

Suggestions:
I loved this little story. It's nice to know at least one other person that doesn't have a problem with age differences. I am presently working on a Short Story/Novella (maybe more) about a sixty-five year old woman and a forty-year old man. I also enjoyed the twist of the wheelchair. You have many great elements pulled into the story.

Character Count: 1,543 (tags = 173 Characters above this point)
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