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Review of The Affair  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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PLOT -
Kathy is having an affair, and ready to give her husband divorce papers when he arrives home a changed man. A new promotion provides him more time to spend with his wife, and he's already making plans for them to catch up. They go away on a ski trip and she begins to remember why she fell in love with him in the first place. Upon their return, she visits Steven, and tells him she's confused. He doesn't take no for an answer and sets out to prove she should be with him and leave her marriage.

SETTING -
It was easy to follow along in this story. Good moments of imagery right at the beginning as Steven and Kathy talk after making love. The moments of the trip were good.

CHARACTERS -
Kathy wants out, though she loves her lifestyle. When Mark comes home a changed man, she is more confused that ever. She never comes out and says she loves Steven, though it's apparent he has those feelings for her and is going to fight for her.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE -
the most valuable commodity here in Southern Heights where the rich come to live in homes that cost half their salary but they because they can. ---missing something here

I have good news" Mark,--move the comma inside the quote


"How about I remind you that for the past few years you've been living in my bed for a reason."

She think she wanted to try again but she wanted to start fresh. --wording

THOUGHTS -
Affairs are tricky things to manage. I felt bad for Mark, especially when Steven showed up just before Kathy was going to come clean and tell him everything. You had three strong characters to work with. Good job there. Never an easy situation and it had me wanting more to see who she would end up with. Write on!
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