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The Decision  Open in new Window. [18+]
One night/ one decision - Trace decides Summer is worth it.
by 💙 Carly - aka Joan Watson Author Icon
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Review by dblameck (David) Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Review of The Decision

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions. This review was done for the Game of Crowns contest.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Kent and Trace were best friends. But now there is a problem. Kent's little sister, Summer, is in a program that Trace is running. They play basketball and there is obviously sexual tension between the two of them.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

They talk later and the sexual tension gets thicker and they make minor physical contact. Trace is still avoiding the obvious because Summer in Kent's little sister. Summer tells him she is not little any longer. She asks for a kiss to satisfy her curosity. One kiss is not enough.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

threatened to rid up - ride up.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

While the intimate details of their relationship are not written they are assumed.

dblameck





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