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The Day it All Changed Open in new Window. [ASR]
A story that explores how an event in the past motivates a character in the present.
by J. Marie Ravenshaw Author Icon
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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PLOT -
Alyssa is woken up in the middle of the night by her brother and mother, bring her devastating news. She learns that her father has died, and instead of being able to grieve, she is thrust into being the rock for her family, getting everyone through the ordeal.

SETTING -
Good visuals of the mother and brother riddled with grief, crying. The overuse of the Kleenex was a nice added touch. The scene in the hospital while she views her father's body was sad, but the comparison of what she's used to seeing and then seeing in her father brought that imagery home.

CHARACTERS -
Alyssa is a nurse, is used to comforting others through terrible things, and seeing death. She has learned to build a wall there and keep herself grounded, but now that death is in her family, she knows what she should be going through, yet can't bring herself to let it all sink in.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE -
On we went to face the reality of my father's premature death. --not sure what you wanted to start this sentence with.

THOUGHTS -
I know what it's like to be the one everyone depends on for emotional support. It makes it difficult to go through the motions yourself as you steel your emotions from the pain. Letting all of it in later just seems to compound all of it. Good story of loss and grieve. I felt really bad for Alyssa, but totally understood her, why she stepped up, and hating that she feels she lost herself along the way.
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