Hi Angus ,

This review is a part of "Small Council Chamber House Greyjoy"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

Ha! I liked the surprise ending of this story, dear Angus. It made me smile. Good cultural reference, that should be instantly recognisable by any reader.

I like how you take a fear of many parents and go with it. Everyone knows how difficult it is to make it in the art world. You have to be very special. And then you let us know that the teacher doesn't think much of the talents of our main character, no matter how hard he tries. Of course, anyone who gets the reference will be in on the joke. Nicely done.

The presentation is easy on the eye, and for that I thank you. The highlighted quote isn't distracting. The larger font is great.

On the whole, I enjoyed this read.

Suggestions:

I only have one suggestion, Angus:

Paragraph 6:

But the next morning as the teacher walked around the class inspecting her student’s work, his dreams were...

I would place a comma before "as".

And I think "student's" should be "students' ".

My Rating:

A fun, enjoyable read that made me smile. I was happy to find it.

I did have a couple of tiny suggestions, but nothing major. I will give this item a rating of 4.5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .