Plot/story elements:

Did I feel attached to the story or poem?

I loved your chapters 1 and 2. I'm going to give as much in depth as I can given the limited amount of time I have to do these reviews. You give a great description of the pirating life in this universe. I can't wait to see how your character is going to the sorcerer to save Twitch.


Would I recommend this piece of writing to someone else?

The Rogue of Andellion is such an engaging story. The universe you're creating is beautiful and complex. The fighting scene is realistic. It's such an engaging story with dialog that furthers our understanding of this universe.


Was there a clear purpose to it?

It is a vast change from chapters 1 and 2. The fight was action packed but since it's 18 and up, I would love for you take advantage of that and add some real gore there. It seems to be a little on the dark side already with him now having to question his humanity at the end.


Glows:

I love that you added a lady pirate character.

Grows:

Parts of the story seem 18 plus and parts seem 13. Like, when the lady pirate calls the other pirates idjits. I think the content you wrestle with is R but the way you execute it is 13+




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