Plot/story elements:

Did I feel attached to the story or poem?

I could see this playing out on an episode of CSI or Law and Order. Really cool scene! Love the inner dialog and the motivation behind it. Creative use of a dialog contest for sure!

Would I recommend this piece of writing to someone else?

I think it's a great piece for anyone who wants to get in the mind of a killer with some sort of psychosis. It's an awesome example of what could go on inside of someone having to come to terms with killing a totally innocent person.

Was there a clear purpose to it?

A good example of something to read for a dialog contest.


Glows:

I love that John seems to be talking to someone else before you realize he's talking to himself in the mirror. The only thing that gave it away was the title.



Grows: Tag:

For me on a side note, I have not figured out how to write internal diaglog when I'm making characters talk to themselves. I see other writers make the same mistakes I get called out on and try to bring it to their attention. This is the first example I've seen where I get what other reviewers are telling me. You put the sentences in active voice and italicized them so it was instructional for me to see it that way.



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~Tsa~ House of Greyjoy







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