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Review of Happy Birthday, My Boy

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions. This review was done for the Game of Crowns contest.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

The story of a prohibition bootlegger named Fannie who holds a birthday party for Bobbie Robster. She makes an effort to get the best price for the whiskey she is serving. However I think that $75 for four shots of whiskey is a bit of a high price particularly in the prohibition era.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Each of Bobbie Robster's gang has an opinion about the price of the whiskey. These characters are: Johnny Rayster, Rup Gruppman, Floyd Pullega, and Mannie McNabb.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

It is a slow story and needs something to make it more interesting.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and sharing your stories.

dblameck


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