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Is abstinence the best policy? Open in new Window. [ASR]
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Review by dblameck (David) Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Review of Is abstinence the best policy

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions. This review was done for the Game of Crowns contest.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

This is a very interesting and humorous flash fiction story. A newly married couple are feeling the normal stress of not having enough time for each other. Now that they are married they realize they had more time for romance before their marriage than what they seem to have now.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Jake and Susie are the newly weds that are having some problems in their relationship. Susie's mother suggests they do things together and they go to church. The church is looking for youth counselors. Susie's mother gets Susie to volunteer her and Jake. The problem is the counselors must abstain from sex to demonstrate that for the youth. Newlyweds having to abstain from sex is a very risky venture. I will not give away what happens but it will bring a smile to your face.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

It's good as it is written.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

I enjoyed the story and chuckled for ten minutes.

dblameck






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