Hi Donkey Hoetay ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

What a beautiful, loving poem, dear author. It's written in a tender manner, encouraging, inspiring, believing in your daughter - a belief that will mean the world to her, I am sure.

It is a poem about growing up, shaping the world around you, discovering your own path in life and making the very best of it. It is also about the love between parent and child, and how beautiful it is to see a child come into her own. You seem like an amazing parent.

On the technical side of things, this poem reads well. I had no trouble catching on to its rhythm and flow. It is nicely presented and easy on the eye. And I love your use of punctuation - very helpful for the overall clarity of the piece.

Suggestions:

I have no suggestions about the poem's content. It's excellent the way it is. The only thing I'd suggest is allowing the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend upon the individual sentences within the piece. You do this on a couple of occasions. I'd do it throughout, to perfect the overall clarity and reading experience.

My Rating:

I enjoyed this poem. I was very happy to find it in your portfolio.

I did have one small suggestion, but that is more of a matter of personal preference. So, I will still give this item a rating of 5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit






My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .