Hi River ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

This is a sweet little story, dear author. It tells the reader of two friends, wandering through the forest, sharing their appreciation of the season and of the other.

It feels as though they have been friends for a very long time. Their memories are bringing out the child in them, all over again. It made me smile.

Suggestions:

I do have some suggestions, dear author. I hope that you will find them helpful!

Paragraph 1 and 2:

I don't think you need a line space between these paragraphs. They read as one paragraph to me.

I think that in the first sentence, "is" should be "was", because of the tense the rest of the story is written in.

I think that "It's" should be "Its".

Paragraph 3:

I think that "has" should be "had".

Paragraph 5:

"think" should be "thinking".

Paragraph 6:

"are" should be "were".

"sits" should be "sat.

I think that "only" should be "other".

Paragraph 9:

You only need one exclamation mark here.

Paragraph 10:

"tree's" should be "trees".

Paragraph 12:

"is" should be "was".

Paragraph 15:

"blow" should be "blew".

"tree's" should be "trees".



That is it for my suggestions. I hope that you found them helpful. I also hope that you can make sense of them, as I always try to use as little of the item as possible, out of respect for you, the author, and to not give away too much to other potential readers.



Characters:

This is quite a short story. Because of this, we do not gain a whole lot of insight into the characters. What we do learn, though, is what matters - the friendship between Hunter and John is a strong one. Both place great value on this. And it brings out the best in them.

Storyline:

The story is one about friendship, and how friendship is something to cherish. It can even rejuvenate a person. It's a sweet piece.

Wording:

The wording is simple, yet effective. It's a pleasant read.

Presentation:

The item has a clear layout that's easy on the eye. I assume that the piece was written to a prompt, considering some words were highlighted in bold.



My Rating:

A pleasant little story that made me smile. I was glad to find it.

I did have quite a few suggestions for what isn't a very long story. It has a lot of potential, but it needs a bit of TLC. For that reason, I will give it a rating of 2.5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .