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Attack Open in new Window. [13+]
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Review by dblameck (David) Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Review of Attack


First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions. This review is being done as part of the Game of Thrones contest.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

The story tells of some desert people who have to travel some distance to even get wood. This sci/fi adventure drops immediately into a conflict. It rests mostly on the relationship of two friends.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Targh D'yer and his friend Sinbe have traveled to the wood supply to bring back wood for a celebration of the marriage of the Headman's daughter. Upon returning instead of a celebration they find thier little town as been attacked by some strange half man half spider. Targh's friend Sinbe is killed while slaying the creature.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

A little more background is necessary.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

This is a good beginning. You should expand it. Well done.

dblameck

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