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Plot/story elements:

Did I feel attached to the story or poem?

I love the beginning. The first line hooked me. The first day started as if nothing happened the night before. It builds anticipation to let the reader know something is building. Comparing yourself to a caged bird is a cool concept. It takes a lot of sensitivity and empathy to dream like that.

Would I recommend this piece of writing to someone else?

It's interesting to write about being caged. I think if more people could dream like that, keeping animals in captivity would be less common. Not a judgement more than an observation. I love how you connected the dream to a greater realization.


Was there a clear purpose to it?

This piece served as a sign to give a bird it's freedom. The author had a dream and took action from it. Dreams often send us signals that we need to act and this piece served as a great reminder of the power our dreams can hold.


*StarStruck* Glows:

The dream was a creative way to put ourselves in the caged bird's perspective. I loved the imagery of the dream. I could feel like I was dreaming the same dream.



*Vine1* Grows: Tag:

I think there should be a period after explanation. But, it was a minor error that didn't detract from the visuals and imagery of the story.





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