Plot/story elements:

Did I feel attached to the story or poem?

I love a good Halloween piece! You capture the night so well, I feel like I'm there. Every year we get warnings to keep our pets indoors. It's funny to me to see that worked in.


Would I recommend this piece of writing to someone else?

It's a great description of Halloween. I love the cool breeze and the sun's rays twinkling through the morning dew on a spider's web. Those images are artistic!


Was there a clear purpose to it?

It's a tribute to one of our most fun holidays, Halloween. Watch out for the ghouls, goblins, witches and ghosts! Watch out for the lurkers! They will get you every time!


Glows:

My favorite image is the caterpillar wrapped up like a mummy. They do look that way but never thought of comparing them like that! And, the fifth verse, watch where you step! The underground can get really scary on this night especially!



Grows:

I'd like to hear more about the environment. You started strong by mentioning the cool breeze, full moon, sun's rays. But, what in the landscape made it look like Halloween? Maybe there were some twisted trees, or dancing shadows.



Miscellaneous Comments:

There were only a couple of lines I would tweak. seen should be see, sun's, spider's.


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~Tsa~ House of Greyjoy







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