Polliwog Blues [E] Ribbit Ribbit |
Plot/story elements: Did I feel attached to the story or poem? Putting yourself in a frog's mind frame is such a cute idea! Thinking of frogs as prideful is a funny idea. And the arch nemesis, the turtle causing such havoc! Really clever drama there. Would I recommend this piece of writing to someone else? It's a cute reflection of what it might be like as a frog. I think it would work well a piece written for a kid's book. Maybe replace the word butt with rear end but the idea is so clever it deserves to have a spot in a kid's book somewhere! Was there a clear purpose to it? I love the idea that the a turtle snapped the tail off. It's so funny that a turtle would cause the frog that much strife and be the reason for their misfortune. Glows: I love the story flow to this piece and putting yourself into the perspective of the the frog is a really cute and clever idea. I loved it. Legs to hop with and tail that whirled is great imagery of a polliwog dancing in the water. Grows: I don't have any suggestions. I even love the color green of this piece. Maybe I would take out the word then before dart and change I was swimming to I swam. They would be just minor grammatical recommendations. Miscellaneous Comments: ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** ~Tsa~ House of Greyjoy My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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