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 Green With Envy Open in new Window. [13+]
Discrimination is like energy. It cannot be made or destroyed, but it can change forms.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Review of Green with Envy

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions. This review is being done in conjunction with the contest Game of Thrones.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I didn't know what to think at first. It seems that some of the competition for the ski-jump event are different shades of green. My first reaction was that perhaps these other contestants were not human. Possibility of people from outer space. As i read more it seems that were were people who just had a shade of green and other who were darker green. The more I the read the more confused I became.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

It seems that they take chlorophyll as a performance enhancing drug.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Make your reason for the colour change more evident.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and sharing your ideas and stories.

dblameck

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