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 Fatal Attraction Open in new Window. [18+]
Natasha plans a surprise which has emotional results
by TJ Marie Author Icon
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Review by dblameck (David) Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Review of Fatal Attraction

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions. This review is done for the Game of Thrones contest for the team of GreyJoy.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Romantic plans go awry when Natasha gets everything ready for a special evening with her boyfriend Corey. Corey has gone fishing with his brother Mike. The story changes when he calls her on her cell phone and suggests a time out in their relationship.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Natasha has been dating Corey for six months and is ready to let their relationship get physical. She sets up his apartment as a romantic getaway and purchases special lingerie, Then his call wanting to slow things down. She gets angry and breaks a few things. He rushes home and has a change of heart. The quick change does not seem realistic to me.

The last paragraph they get physical and this is the erotic portion of the story. I found it a bit tame.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

None.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Cory seems to change too quickly.

dblameck

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