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PLOT -
Jane's new boyfriend gets easily irritated when she doesn't hear what he's been talking about. She is caught up in the music, the melody of the violin that only she seems to hear. The couple argue, and Jason decides he's going to the arcade and she can just wait until he finished and then he will take her home. Jane becomes angry and decides it's time to break up. She shouts this to Jason after he walks off, which only has his running back to confront her. She follows the music into the cemetary.

SETTING -
Good visuals of Jason smoking his cigarette, of the sound of the music playing just for Jane, and the ensuing escape over the fence and into the cemetery. The story moved forward at a good pace, drawing the reader further into the story.

CHARACTERS -
Jane can't help but remember Michael, and how different he was from Jason, making her miss Michael even more. Jason seems more concerned about himself than he does about his girlfriend. Jane worries about her mental health, especially being the only one who can hear the music playing.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE -
The violin music is all around me but I cannot see its source.

THOUGHTS -
Michael is calling Jane from beyond, doing his best to coax her to find him as he plays his violin for her. Finally, she arrives and is able to escape Jason. Michael shows himself, as a black cloud at first, until his form comes into focus for Jane. Bittersweet to lose the love of your life, and she finally gets the dance he promised between realms. Sad story of love and loss. Sometimes it's not easy to truly move on and when we do and it's the wrong person, it just compounds the loss.

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