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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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PLOT -
Jamie and his parents decide it's time to prank the pranksters and go to elaborate lengths to spook them senseless. A camera crew arrives, needing an escape from the weather and show up at Jamie's house, unaware of what they are in for.

SETTING -
Good job with Jamie being the one to greet them, acting scared about telling his parents he let strangers into the house. Jamie becomes fascinated with the trick knife that Clary shows him

CHARACTERS -
Jamie doesn't care too much for Tony, and takes an interest in Clary, her being nice and not referring to him as a kid. Jamie's mother makes an appearance, upset, trying to kick the couple out of her home.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE -
But I guess it was too late because I saw a lady in a white robe descending down the stairs: my mother.

Tony tries to calm her down but it is Clary’s hug which coaxes some words out of her lips –

Jamie yelled at him and tried to stop him but that devil had other plans and kicked me in my stomach.

His spirits haunts this place

THOUGHTS-
I admit you had me going. I really thought that when his mother came downstairs upset and carrying on and told the tale that it were true. It was easy to see the chaos of Jamie springing out and going on the attack with Clary first, and then Tony who turned white as a ghost. They had no trouble playing the joke on others, yet when the tables are turned they quickly learn just how funny their pranks really are. Write On!

This would be my name.
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