Hi Survivor48 ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

This is a strong poem, dear author. I think that it's a piece that many people will be able to relate to, and even aspire to.

Your poem speaks of the struggles people face. Life can be difficult. It can bring you down. You highlight the importance of seeking joy, regardless of what happens. Cherishing life, cherishing yourself, maintaining a positive attitude. That's what makes one a survivor, and that is an important message to share.

On the technical side of things, this poem has a nice rhythm to it, and I liked your wording and use of punctuation!

Suggestions:

I do have some suggestions, dear author. I hope that you will find them helpful!

Stanza 1:

Previous obstacles has caused...

I think that "has" should be "have".

Stanza 4:

Conflicts of misery has led to pain

I think this should either be "Conflict of misery has led to pain" or "Conflicts of misery have led to pain".

General Suggestion:

As I mentioned above, I like your use of punctuation. This helps the overall clarity of the piece. To perfect this clarity and the overall reading experience, I suggest allowing the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend on the individual sentences within the piece.

My Rating:

I enjoyed reading your poem. It must have taken a lot of strength to write it.

I did have a couple of suggestions, however. For that reason, I will give your poem a rating of 4 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit






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