Plot/story elements:


Did I feel attached to the story or poem?

I love that you wrote an introduction to this! I wish it were a more common practice. It's not my usual fair but it was well written with colorful jewels of language in just the right spots.


Would I recommend this piece of writing to someone else?

I would recommend this to people who love anthropology, different cultures intertwined with more than a hint of spice.

It's a good erotica piece. It definitely hits the mark there.


Was there a clear purpose to it?

It was a fist person account of translated memoirs. Your grandfather sounds like he was a pirate or at the very least, an avid sailor. As far as story telling, I didn't get the sense that there was much of a dramatic telling as much as it was an account of a vastly different culture.


Glows:

you painted a vivid portrayal of your grandfather's desires and fascination with the African tribe of Mariba. I just wonder if it's a fictitious account or an actual transcription. Either way, it makes for a great intercultural fantasy.



Grows:

I'm not sure contented is a word. I think it's one of those with a strange twist in that it stays the same in both present and past tense.



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