Hi Amay ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

This is a very cute poem, dear author. I think that it is one that many people, both young and old, will be able to relate to.

I remember the days when I wanted to play just one more game. Desperately. I didn't want the fun to end. To do chores, or to go somewhere else, or to go to bed. Just one more game, that's what I needed. And then another one.

Now that I am older, kids are still the same. But you are right, we learn through play. That should be acknowledged. Play is an essential part of growing up and being supplied with the skills you need in life. This poem describes that very well.

On the technical side of things, I liked the rhythm and flow of the poem. I also like the presentation - the use of different colours works. Well done!

Suggestions:

I only have one suggestion, dear author, and it may well be one of personal preference. I like your use of punctuation. That aids the overall reading experience. I would also allow the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend on the individual sentences within the piece. I think that that would perfect the overall clarity and make it even easier to instantly pick up on the rhythm and flow.

My Rating:

This is a cute, fun poem. I was happy to read it.

I did have one suggestion, but that is one of personal preference. For that reason, I will still give the item a rating of 5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .