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Review of Old Jack  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*NoteV* Story ~
Such a twist of an ending! Again you had me thinking of someone, only to find out I was wrong. That's twice. Very creative tale of desperation and an escape that didn't come.
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*NoteG* Characters ~
Old Jack who is so tired of waiting, watching, being cold knowing that sooner of later he is going to die. His desperation to escape, knowing he's the next one on the list screamed off the screen. I felt so bad for him, for all that he had endured.

*NoteV* Issues ~
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*NoteG* Impressions ~
Another good short story. I do have to say that I laughed at the end. All of the excitement and rooting for Jack to make his escape had me on the edge of my seat. I could see the forest line just calling him, begging him to run. Great imagery of the bedding, and the others who just couldn't bring themselves to follow Jack in an attempted escape. Good use of description. I liked the friendship with Lucy, even how he thought she would go with him and see her fall in love one day. His own dream of clean water to drink was vivid as I read through the story. I wanted all of the things for Jack, that he wanted for himself. Too bad it had to end, and not the way he preferred. Nicely done. Write on!
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